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The pattern is slightly off of the tanka style. If you are not going to do the 5-7-5-7-7 pattern, it must at least be short-long-short-long-long. So your...
how can one sit alone for one always has another to sit by one can never be alone unless it has been taken from its home but do any of us really have a home ...
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what about this: leaves in late autumn wind converse lonely in the field her back faces me thank you for your help. i want to get more input before i call...
Much better. Fits all the way round as far as I can see. you're welcome. :-) ********************************** "Leave no trace upon the earth but the...
each day needs a few good poems without which, mere work seems a waste of time, a bruise to the soul --Michael McClintock Sort of a variation on the...
off-and-on showers make this a good day to stay indoors unwinding tangles of memory, braiding water-images in ink --Michael McClintock Yep, that is EXACTLY...
... extra syllable? I think that since you have a comma after 'which,' it may be okay to end L2 with it. Just a humble suggestion of course. I really like ...
It does not really have the pattern. The whole essence of tanka is based on the rhythm and cadence of breath and pattern. Each line should, as I understand...
... Does it ... just one extra syllable? I think that since you have a comma after 'which,' it may be okay to end L2 with it. Just a humble suggestion of...
Good thoughts, Norla, but I dunno, I dunno . . . so many fine tanka I have read break that pattern. Here is one I much admire by Karina Young, from The Tanka...
... Editor, I find all styles of tanka to be valid, as long as the tanka-spirit is present, although I prefer the s,l,s,l,l/waka style for my own personal ...
Just the thought of a passerby ... it is the word mere that bothers me. However, I'm having a problem in saying why. Mere means without an admixture.The first...
this heat against the cold windowpane my breath forming a returning ghost haunts passing like a fever blessings, dustin neal http://ihaiku.blogspot.com ...
If it is not in the tanka pattern, what makes it tanka, and not just a five line poem? It becomes free verse in five lines without the pattern, imo. It's...
Hey, hi, Norla, just kinda passing by myself too, though I may participate more regularly a bit later on... "what makes it tanka, and not just a five line...
Hi, Dustin. With my comments, bear in mind that I haven't been writing tanka for terribly long; hopefully, another more-experienced writer or two will also...
TSA for sure. The links at Tanka is Now are purely tanka and all online. If TSA has a web site I'd love to add a link to them as well. I really do not see any...
oops, one more thing. I wanted to say, dustin, that I checked out your blogsites, and I think they are beautiful. I'm also very impressed by your mission to...
Children loud at play teenagers young lovers their secret whisperings; These days the only thing still working my eavesdropping ear. My best Norman [Non-text...
