Louis, here's an edited version of your tanka. It is good to have mystery (yugen) and allow the reader to interpret, luring them into your poetry. robert...
robert ~ thanks for the help ~ louis ... From: robert wilson <foamfish@...> To: Tanka@yahoogroups.com Sent: Friday, June 1, 2007 12:53:44 PM Subject: Re:...
sky barely visible through redwood forest canopy -- a reminder of my place in the universe -Deborah P Kolodji ************************************** See...
___ woodpecker raps on dead wood lost lost lost ! marker disappeared flapping rag on a thorn ___ rambling short of breath in deep silt last year's picnic along...
fresh spring water gifts of fruit and nectar long flavored clear wine shanna http://hawaiian-poet-tree.blogspot.com/ http://www.photoshow.com/watch/RQ9Ec3Kj ...
I like this one, Louis. ~K~ ... -- Poet, Heron Sea, Short Poems of the Chesapeake Bay <Lulu.com/firepearls> Editor, Fire Pearls: Short Masterpieces of the...
M. Kei
kujaku@...
Jun 6, 2007 1:03 am
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~K~ many thanks for the read appreciate the comment ~ louis ... From: M. Kei <kujaku@...> To: Tanka@yahoogroups.com Sent: Tuesday, June 5, 2007 5:55:44...
caged birds sing songs of unrequited love in perfect harmony licking my wounds I found safe refuge and built a wall to protect my heart from further damage ...
Announcing the 6th Tanka Poetry Contest for high school students -- The SEITO Hyakunin Isshu -- Deadline for submissions: November 9, 2007. For further...
___ from habit demanding to be picked up the sunday paper stories born this last day how can so much happen ? ___ the short cut hurried through corridors ...
I like can feel what your saying here but the .and .for some reason doensnt ring for me.. aloha shanna ... From: Dr. Vidur Jyoti To: Tanka@yahoogroups.com ...
thnks shanna i must appreciate and acknowledge your vision. Will it be appropriate if 'and' is replaced by 'as'? regards vidur ... -- Vidur [Non-text portions...
how about just... breeze, runs soft fingers through my hair aloha shanna thnks shanna i must appreciate and acknowledge your vision. Will it be appropriate if ...
enjoying the interaction and the feeling........ but i cannot replace 'her' with 'my' when talking of hair. Yes breeze running soft fingers is a very good...
in the dooryard of the house long gone old lilacs bloom will the scent of my own still bloom after me? with his ring he took her off put in a box with all...
I like your second two. ~K~ ... -- Poet, Heron Sea, Short Poems of the Chesapeake Bay <Lulu.com/firepearls> Editor, Fire Pearls: Short Masterpieces of the...
M. Kei
kujaku@...
Jun 12, 2007 11:02 pm
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ditto from me , too ~ louis "M. Kei" <kujaku@...> wrote: I like your second two. ~K~ ... -- Poet, Heron Sea, Short Poems of the Chesapeake Bay...
Dear Kei, Robert & Louis- just some simple ones to get my feet wet. It's been a while since posting here, so your encouragement is deeply appreciated. (Yeah,...
Dear Vidur- You paint luscious images. Quite beautiful. I've taken the liberty of tightening up your prose. In tanka, we generally follow a pattern of: short...
