For me..the improvement is an improvement...my suggestions were very minor and probaly unecessary..I do like it. Kirsty ***'lost' in not needed if he is found...
Nick, the "pivot" in tanka (or waka before that) is simply the shift or turn in the poem, the point where the point can be seen to have two parts (if it does)....
I have to admit to some skepticism that a tanka could have two or three "pivots" and still be successful. I would also be suspicious of a tanka that tried to...
waxing a single white chocolate rose beneath the harvest moon wilting petals-- I've always preferred incessant nagging to your sharp thorns an ineffable pink...
an unmanicured Prince Charles edges up the lattacework-- a muddy Camela in pursuit. . . . Jim Minsung [Non-text portions of this message have been removed]...
Hurricane warning one yellow butterfly on the wing Lewis Sanders Everyone I hope I don't get in trouble for annoucing this on the list, I have In Buddha's ...
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my favourite things best enjoyed in small measure like this stillness before the morning rush as I sit with my tea just a few moments to savour the warmth of...
in the panes a single rose incarnadine reflects another hundred days in Baghdad from within my unkempt garden crimson petals fall orderly Jim Minsung [Non-text...
I would greatly appreciate commentary of any and all sorts. . . . Please? JM a catastrophic welcome another hero's uncharacteristically cold shoulders confront...
Hello, people. Since posting doesn't get much of a rouse 'round these parts, I'm officially resorting to bribery. Here's a recipe for a chocolate cake. Eat it...
... hi jim i find the second line too long and the word 'incarnadine' too, dunno what exactly, tricksy/unduly difficult/long/just somehow inappropriate in...
Dear Sheila-- Thank you so very much for both your excellent reading (when you make a point about redundancy, then I suddenly see what you mean--not that I am...
precariously placed winter winds shudder oak trees rhythmically sway grandfather resists cancer ninety nine years flow forward Five days shy of 100 the battle...
Hi Everyone, In starting the work on this issue of LYNX, we got a new idea of how to organize the material. In so doing we have opened a space for individual, ...
... everything to heart. I apologize for my inconveniences and intrusions. JMinsung ... Shrimp Diane from back in the day--maybe it's "dated," in that it ...
Dear Thelma, I so enjoyed your tanka - I could really settle into your brief and thoroughly enjoyable tea in the morning. It reminds me of my experiences of ...
Norla, Thank you for your useful comment. Reminds me of the Iching, where you have the six lines forming one unified hexagram, the top and bottom three lines...
Dear Michael,
Thank you very much for your explanation, and the definition from PaperFrog= .
Nick
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... Ah! ... I'd love to join you Kirsty! Maybe we can all stop whatever we are doing at 3:00, have a sip of tea, and just take a moment. That way we can all be...
... experiences of ... with ... of "hearing ... Dear Julie, Thanks so much for your comments. I think we all need to stop and let the world go by sometimes. I...
I pause to watch willow fronds at the lakeshore - the familiar brush of your beard against my face this spring green day Maria This email was scanned by ICL's...
