... ***Pleasant, this tanka. So many 'ing' words, though! You could start by changing the final line to "I long...". Change does provoke deeper thought which...
Hello Tanka members. This is my first post and the fourth tanka I've written too. C&C welcome anytime. I look forward to posting, commenting, reading,...
... I really like this tanka Thelma. The alliterative 'l's' followed by the 'oh's sounds bring the moment to life. Very sensory. A nice juxtaposition too;...
... Oh, I remember crate days! Very nice tanka Jeanne. By saying 'at home the dog alone listening', it sounds as there might be someone else that could be...
inspired by margaret atwood...The Visit.. a forest made of shadows dog-earing the pages-- i left off yesterday, so where do i begin today? watching the sun...
... ***Love the relationship between the caring presence and the rain-freshened fern...but I am torn with curiosity as to who the caring person is and what ...
In a message dated 11/1/2004 7:01:59 PM Central Standard Time, ... this is beautiful , light and we almost lean with the sail ...bowing...karina [Non-text...
I have no tanka for now. But I don't know if you have all visited the site http://www.japanpoem.com It offers a free greeting card service, where each card...
how is it your caring pesence makes me want to weep? rain freshening the autumn fern Jeanne I read this poem after returning from a funeral for a friend and ...
rose petals and ashes blow out to sea a white sail leans into sunset Kirsty another gem,there was a bowl of red rose petals amongst the incense at the funeral...
To write a tanka under a tamarind tree, leaves falling on me-- for this alone I will go back to Santa Lucia. This is an attempt to write tanka in strict...
... just to follow the rule, but because of the beautiful, musical rhythm it evokes. Santa Lucia, by the way, is a (still)rustic coastal town in a northern...
... rhythm ... back ... sunset, ... roh, what a beautiful tanka! whether 5,7,5,7,7 or shorter, to take account of the japanese onji being shorter than english...
... sail ...bowing...karina make that two bowing beautifully simple, simply beautiful . . . and more poignantly evocative than any other words could convey, ...
... ***This has great appeal. I have re-read and enjoyed it very much. Your explanation makes it very special, as this place is to you. I really like the...
In a message dated 11/1/2004 1:28:25 PM Central Standard Time, macrury@... writes: Eternity at the window with the dog watching a leaf on a darkening...
